Unfinished Rooms
If death took the stool beside me,
lowered its glass with sacerdotal calm,
fixed its hollow little gaze on mine
and murmured,
time’s up,
I’d look past its shoulder
toward the door,
then down at the peanut bowl,
then back at that bony bureaucrat
dressed for a funeral
it clearly hoped to invoice.
Pardon?
Whose time, precisely?
Mine is distributed
across several unruly chambers.
In the kitchen, onions wait
beside a knife
with operatic ambitions.
In the hall, one shoe has disappeared
into domestic mythology.
The spare room contains
three abandoned notions,
a mutinous bag of cables,
paintbrushes stiff with old intention,
and a cupboard door
bulging with the private sediment
of a life insufficiently filed.
Death might raise one finger,
thin as a question mark,
summoning its dreary authority.
I’d tell it to inspect the premises.
Plants lean toward me
with chlorophyll accusations.
Apples cling to the tree outside,
fat with unfinished sweetness.
Dogs require adoration
at medically urgent intervals.
Cats demand arbitration,
tributes,
and occasional apologies
for crimes I have not yet committed.
Somewhere, no doubt,
washing lies damp in the machine
developing a philosophy
and possibly a small republic
Besides,
love has not finished
making an absolute nuisance of me.
There is a new child
with milk warm breath
and the whole astonished future
folded inside her fist.
There are faces I have not kissed enough,
rooms I have not forgiven,
letters unwritten,
soup unmade,
wildflowers still plotting
their gaudy insurrection
through the cracks.
My body has been difficult,
faithless in places,
miraculous in others,
yet it dragged me here,
to this ridiculous bar,
where mortality sits beside me
pretending to be management.
So no.
Not tonight.
Let the clock sulk
in its cheap metallic certainty.
Let the glass sweat.
Let death count the crumbs
and reconsider the scale
of its errand.
What would I say
when that final visitor
leaned close
with its cold little summons?
I’d say,
come back when the rooms are tidy.
Then I’d laugh,
because honestly,
that buys me
at least another century.


Girl this is beautiful.
I love your imagery of domestic chaos.
Onions waiting for a knife with "operatic ambitions" and a shoe lost to "domestic mythology" are highly relatable, vivid images.
Phrases like "a mutinous bag of cables" and "paintbrushes stiff with old intention" perfectly capture human procrastination and unfinished projects.
The line about damp clothes "developing a philosophy and possibly a small republic" is brilliant, absurd, and deeply funny.
The poem shifts beautifully from the comedic clutter of life to the deep, emotional anchors that actually hold us here.
The transition to "love has not finished making an absolute nuisance of me" changes the stakes. Bringing in the new child with "the whole astonished future folded inside her fist," the faces not kissed enough, and the soup unmade grounds the defiance in genuine love and regret rather than just stubbornness.
Describing the body as "difficult, faithless in places, miraculous in others" feels profoundly honest. It acknowledges aging or illness without giving up, celebrating the fact that this flawed physical form still successfully "dragged me here, to this ridiculous bar."
Girl. This is beautiful.❤️
I wanted to let you know I included this piece in my weekly roundup. I really liked this and wanted to share. Here is the link to my roundup if you’d like to take a look: https://fiztrainer.substack.com/p/what-stayed-with-me-week-of-june.